Honestly, based on everything I’ve read so far, I wouldn’t be surprised if pirateaba’s Innworld setting runs on an inverted Karma system. As in, if you’re somewhat of a good or even just decent person, bad things will constantly happen to you. Friends will get killed for no reason, you’ll get treated like crap by people in power with no way to fight back, lose things that are important to you, and so on, and so forth.
On the other hand, if you’re a genocidal maniac, war-monger, or just all-around asshole, good things will just drop in your lap completely at random.

The really sad thing to think about is, even with how bad of a parent as Tyrion seems to be, he’s still better than quite a lot of parents on Earth.

If you just use “Rose.” with no context it is someone’s name. It should have some context like; Rose up from chair” or “Rose and left.” That makes more sense than “Rose.
Left.”

“Rose” in my opinion is a wrong choice here… Should have gone with “got up” or “stood up.” If you want to keep “Rose” change the sentence this way, “Rose and left.” or like below.

“Levil raised his mug. Ryoka turned red from the embarrassment. She exchanged a few more words, promised to drink with them later.
Rose.
Left.”

I have a theory that Earthers have some kind of probability effect around them

far too many have been “in the right place at the right time” for it to be chance

but that may be survivorship bias because the majority of Earthers died in the first 3 weeks or so, only the ones in extraordinary circumstances lasted this long

still doesn’t explain anything past book 3 or so

“She had—a passion for women.”

The referent for “She” is Sidel. You mean “Ieka had”.

When the Petals of Death are voting on killing Magnolia, one says “Agreed.” The previous one had said “No.”, but it counts as a “yes” for the total below. I think that’s a mistake, but it could just be my bad social skills at work.

“For all she could be a fiery as he.”

“be a fiery” should be “be as fiery”.

“twenty five” -> “twenty-five”
“thirty eight” -> “thirty-eight”
“Twenty one” -> “Twenty-one”