“Because the Hive does not produce enough food to accommodate more bodies, Sergeant Yellow Splatter.”
Should be: “Because the Hive does not produce enough food to accommodate more bodies, Sergeant Yellow Splatters.”

Mans lost his S :(

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“Anand wavered, but then he spoke, clasping all four hands behinds his back.”
Should be: “Anand wavered, but then he spoke, clasping all four hands behind his back.”

SHE IS ALIVE. SHE TRIED TO KILL YOU.

It seems Toren may become a threat in the future, I wonder about the full extent of his abilities from all the time in the dungeon.

Highly doubtful. Using a criminal as a spy would be a terrible idea. Especially one that notable. Way too easy for it to just get randomly picked up by the Watch or whoever. Literally, if Klbkch hadn’t been with two junior guards, all the effort to place such a character in the city would have instantly gone up in flames.

Toren! Toreeen!

I sometimes want to hit KlbkCh with something. He’s so focussed on the view of the forest that’s he’s missing the beautiful trees. He continues to say that the individuals are not true antinium but he does not know them. Then, the’re all scared of him too so that doesn’t help and now Anand wants to be noticed above all others. (sigh)

He got an enchanted ring that makes gluten (and other foods) non-poisonous to him.

. It is still markedly better than before, although I still must become used to fighting with two less arms. (Should be “two FEWER arms”)

Oh I am really concerned about Anad specifically pointing out the flaws of everyone around him.

I LOST IT. ERIN TOLD ANAD TO CALL KLBKCH DAD. I CAN’T. EVEN. HE WENT TOTAL BLUESCREEN.

Also, loving how the Horns are pulling in around Pisces, defending him and stepping up about his abilities.

The whole thing with Ijvani. I have no idea where you’re going with it, but I’m enjoying it. I hope the healing slime gets a chance to escape. Unless it gets taken back… can it “heal” Bea?

Oh. Oh Toren…

“above out set limitations”
out -> our

“Only two Soldier survived last time”
Soldier -> Soldiers

“And we shall continue your instruction””
Add a full stop after “instruction”

“Miss Ulinde.”
I’m having issues with the “Miss” title. You just mentioned Ulinde is in a male body, and Selphids tend to take on the pronouns of their bodies; do they keep their titles? Decide and make consistent across the story, because as Jelaqua’s teammate, Moore should already be used to it.

“Ulinde’s eyes went round. She looked up at Moore.”
She -> He (because the previous paragraphs used He several times)
… seriously, the entire segment needs to be proofread after you’ve made a decision about Selphids an. pronouns