“Yellow Splatters knew he had the advantage. He was bigger, stronger, thanks to his classes, and he had the [Touch Carapace] and [Power Strike] Skills. Only, he wouldn’t use [Power Strike]; he’d just beat Purple Smile within an inch of his life to prove to everyone who was right! He lashed out and Purple Smile dodged backwards, two hands raised protectively, the other two warding off punches.”

I think [Touch Carapace] should be [Tough Carapace].

Hey now, that’s not necessarily true.

The eater goats could have chomped her head in half, killing her almost instantly, and with relatively little pain!

Because they saved her from a very, VERY painful death.

I like that little touch with the Hob stopping Lyonette.

Lyonette stared at it, pulled sliver out of Erin’s foot, and then healed the rest.
Lyonette stared at it, pulled the sliver out of Erin’s foot, and then healed the rest.

…he had the [Touch Carapace]
…he had the [Tough Carapace]

The cold prick of metal jabbed into his side, painful, making his break off.
The cold prick of metal jabbed into his side, painful, making him break off.

Wait till later, short chapters are around 20k words

“Anand frowned, the Antinium equivalent of lowering his mandibles and drawing them together slightly.”
Should be the other way around – lowering the mandibles is the Antinium equivalent of frowning.

“Add in the Halfseekers, and there were three zones of tension and a very narrow pathway down the center of the inn that {was} in theory, neutral ground.”
{was} -> {was,}